Saw a beautiful land with trees and nature.
I was nerves but I had a lot of plans.
I saw a new future but also saw a lot of wild life.
Feel like I could come here twice.
Suddenly other people appeared.
Nothing could compare.
I am a Year 8 student at Panmure Bridge School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Learning Space 2 and my teachers are Ms Kirkpatrick and Mrs Anderson.
Hi Savelina. I really like your poem. You have a couple of rhymes near there end, which I think is great. Remember to double check your work before posting it.
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ReplyDeleteI love that your poem rhymes! It's also cool to hear the excitement in your poem - that you were nervous but you knew you had to go because you had great plans for what you were going to do when you got there!
Well done!
Nicky :)
Hello Savelina, your poem sound amazing. I like how you have added some rhymes in your poem. Remember that you proof read your work before you publish it on your blog. Anyways you are doing a fantastic job. Keep it up.
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