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Tuesday 11 July 2017

Winter learning journey / Day 5 activity 1

For this activity I had to write a short story (8-10 sentences) to write this story I had to pretend that I was lost in a forest. I had to type down what will happen next.

One bright lovely morning I went down to Taupo I loved the beautiful view of the forest so I went to take a look. I was so busy looking a the wonderful trees and plants that  when I finally snapped out of it I realized I was lost by myself. I had a panic attack my heart was beating like I ran a marathon. I had no water and no food but luckily I ate a lot before I got lost. I was sitting down before I notice I fall asleep. I woke up and was hungry I was so hungry I felt like I haven't ate in two weeks. I felt like I was going to fall to the ground but as my eyes were about to close I could her noises IT WAS MY GROUP they found me right in time.

5 comments:

  1. Hi Savelina
    Great story! The best part was when you wrote 'I was so hungry I felt like I haven't eaten in two weeks', great use of similes. Keep up the amazing work.
    Daniel

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  2. Hi Savelina.
    I like how you've done this activity like I have, and that's making it like a small narrative with noises and other things that you think you would experience. Keep up the great blogging.

    - Jack

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  3. Hi Savelina. Great story. I personally like the ending. Remember to always double check your work before posting it. You have been doing a great job on the Winter Learning Journey, keep it up.

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  4. Malo Savelina!

    This is a really creative story! I like that you have used a similie - "my heart was beating like I ran a marathon"!

    I used to live in Taupo and there are lots of beautiful forest to explore and forest walks to go on. That was one of my favourite parts of living there, swims in the lake and forest walks in the summer!

    Nice writing Savelina!

    Nicky :)

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  5. Hello Savelina, I really like how you have added in some similes to make your story sound more interesting. Remember to double check your work before your post it onto your blog. Besides that you have done an amazing job.

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