Editing-TEE OCS

Editing

Orientation

Complication

Solution

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One summer morning at onetree hill on the path there was A rock that was different from the other rocks.Although the only difference is that the rock was blue,flat and it was really smooth.One day later a young girl walked pass the rock but the rock was soo flat that she thought it was a blue flat paper.

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But as she was walking another young girl walked pass and saw the rock the rocks.Suddenly turned Orange,huge and rough But The young girl was too busy talking to her friend.Then the rock had changed to a normal,grey and ruff.

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And then out of nowhere the Rock Started to fly but to be honest if a rock flew the best thing that could happen is that it could fly then just flew down and hit someone you hate.And if they were your friends ,if it hit me I would either die or still be alive.But I could and my friends might be alive.These are the best things that I think could happen if a rock could fly.

Today in LS1 I did my writing.I had to edit my narrative writing that I wrote.I had to add TEE OCS which stands for Topic explanation Examples Orientations Complication and Salutation I learnt what TEE OCS mean and how to edit my writing>